Never thought this would be the place for serious discussion on editing...
Ghostrek is what he is, and there's no getting around the fact that just making the story understandable means adding words and reordering phrases. Something like that is difficult enough because an editor's job has always been to do the bare minimum cutting and to never add content. For someone who has dyslexia (which I believe Ghostrek has said he does) longer sentences are a problem, and the truncated screenplay type delivery is integral not just to him expressing himself but also him understanding the world around him.