Theme or message- 2.5 points. You stick to one idea fairly well- the doll being possessed. It gets muddled as to whether the doll was possessed in the beginning or not, but on the whole it doesn't really matter: very simple story structure- Abused kid dies, mom wants revenge, goes to voodoo lady who puts kid into doll, end. Revenge theme does not get explored at all
Plot, setting, etc- 2 points. Plot goes nowhere, very few details, those that are there seem unnecessary. No real suspense or action, dialogue is mediocre at best.
Organization- 2 points. No real closure to the story, Ric said it best: "I know the main point of the story is the doll possession but it ends abruptly and the whole revenge plot went nowhere, as did the possibility of the doll being supernatural beforehand."
Language and style- 2 points. Vocabulary needs work, sentence structure is often confusing, random switches between past and present tenses, first and third person, tone needs a lot of work.
Conventions- 1 point, but you specifically said to disregard this aspect of the story, so there we are.