My review of @ghosrek's fanfiction- chapters 1-4:
I will be using this rubric.
Attention: I'll give you a B-. We see that Kagome is very hostile, and the reader may feel some draw to figure out what caused this anger. However the reader could easily interpret this anger as a simple personality facet, which really lessens the impact.
Originality: C+. Plot is just a christmas carol, however the cast of characters and their interactions are... relatively speaking original in this context. Cliches though, you struggle with. From Kagome getting mad at InuYasha for turning up the heat, to SPOILER ALERT kagome's christmas miscarriage... The out of body experience while having a heart attack also sounds similar to a plot point in last season's Venture Bros finale. The imagery of godzilla singing christmas carols, the dialogue during that scene, and the ghost part (assuming the out of body experience line wasn't lifted) were highlights
Interest: I'll give you another C+ here. The crux of the problem is, the same as it was in the original christmas carol. the shock of revisiting painful memories does have an effect on Kagome's character, though it could definitely use to be expounded upon more thoroughly.
Clarity: C-. I was very confused when Kagome and godzilla were discussing their business. I feel like if there were more backstory the story would be improved.
Mechanics: D.
All told, solid C thus far.