Gina Szanboti

Ah, my boy gets to twinkle all over the place this episode! Dose purty violet eyes... The cheese stands alone.

Ok, but then you should've used "hallowed." Using the gerund form makes no sense. The entrance may have been sanctified and become holy, but it's not conferring that holiness onto anything else. And sad to say, you have to be careful about wordplay with words people chronically misuse, like "baited" when they do mean "bated." It's like "weary" and "wary" (half the time I can't even tell by context which they intend anymore) or "bear with me" vs "bare with me." You can certainly use them in wordplay, but rampant internet illiteracy means you've got to be very clear what you're up to, or it will just look like you goofed. Yeah, I got the joke about the prophesy, I'm just saying I thought you overplayed it by doubling down on it with the preview. Ymmv. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ I forgot to tell Sponges that the cheese bit in the factory somehow reminded me of The Cheese Man in Buffy the Vampire Slayer. "I really meet the most appalling sort of people."

I don't even know what the hell a pool noodle is for. Not that I need to. They just seem like Nerf light sabers.

Does flexing dude have an alien baby growing in there above his waistband? That bulge ain't right...

Wut?

Heh, I was afraid you were going to ask me that. Now I gotta go c&p it and reread it again. "Everyone stopped and postured to the dying man if he would appreciate any assistance to the other side." I think you were after a word that means "asked" like "inquired of" but maybe you meant "proposed." But if so, then making it a conditional (if) becomes awkward. Me, I'd just rewrite the whole sentence as "Everyone stopped and pondered whether they should assist the dying man to the other side." Or something. Because "postured" doesn't mean anything here, so I'm still not sure what you intended to say. [I did like the whole recurring "me-shaped wound" bit. But I think you jumped the gun on the prophesy joke by revealing it in the previous sentence. One step too meta. ] "Papa is in peril?" I eked out. "eeked out" maybe? I assume you were going for the onomatopoeia, but "eked" is already a word that means something entirely different. "I barked into the hallowing abyss." Hollow? Hallowed? Howling? "Hallowing" would be making holy, which I'm not sure that an abyss can do. "We waited with baited breath" Bated. Although in this story, maybe their breath was baited with something to attract monsters? There were some other typos and grammar issues, but everyone has those, and I'm not dealing with that.

Because the angel looks like a little girl, and the halflings look like children. The scene with the sex-changed halfling, showing her tiny pubescent-looking naked breasts was just a wee bit over the line. Do no 300 year old halfling women have full breasts (like at least a B-cup)? They made that choice, to appeal to the pedos.

Yeah, I ended up doing that. I enjoyed your story, but I think you used some words that don't mean what you think they mean (if they were intentional, then it wasn't obvious enough). >.> But I'm a sucker for wordplay like "What lies before you is a throne of lies," and I usually enjoy a good wrecking ball to the 4th wall. @PokeNirvash Sponges couldn't have been clearer about the threesome. "We are a triumvirate. Myself, the father; the creator. The s**t-hand man; our prodigal son. You, the reader, the observer, the holy ghost which breathes life into the work." That line was actually kind of weird to read, since I'd just posted over in OA that very sentiment, albeit not so poetically phrased. If I'm still around by then, and get enough warning, I might whip out an entry. Y'all have inspired me. I might've done this round, but I couldn't work up any enthusiasm for the drug deal and threesome requirements. I do better with genres, settings, a character, a line, and/or word count as limiting parameters than specific situations.

I'm on Firefox/Mac and GSH's was the only one cut off like that, so I still haven't read it (it looked interesting from a brief scan). I tried changing the zoom, but that just made it cut off at different words. So it's like the document is too large for the space, regardless of the text within its borders.

Yes.

There are faint cat pawprints waaaaay up on the top doors of my kitchen cupboards (about 9 ft up). I don't have a cat.

I think my first 3-D waifu was Joanna Cassidy. She has the best laugh I've ever heard.

For reasons that utterly escape me, my favorite character has become Yuga Aoyama. I guess he won me over during the licensing test (or whatever that big competition arc was). There's just something about that little v smile that gets me.

I agree, when people take it seriously. I use the terms ironically (waits for Scoob to smack me with his giant fan), as may be apparent from the number I posted. No pillows, no figures except the ones I got because of their ornate outfits, no printouts, posters, scrolls or wallpapers, just some old screencaps buried in files on my comp.

When you're 16 and still single, I guess. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ What, he's trying to flatten it out!

Ha, that pic reminds me of Jesus in Saint Young Men.

I don't know who the guy in blue is, but he looks like a villain, which reminded me of my second favorite bad boy husbando, Il Palazzo from Excel Saga. I think it was the glasses. Unfortunately, he kinda got carried away with the shoulder pads... And one more waifu, Kurau Amami from Kurau: Phantom Memory. If only Christmas hadn't kept taking up all her screen time.

That was no boating accident!

Tapirlope (saiga)

In what, Bund or IR? Were you watching the censored version?

Well, some anime content has apparently been more explicit than the manga. Also, once they saw the halfling sex in Ep 3, which was pretty much visually child porn, I can see why they'd be squeamish once they thought about it some more and started wondering what else was coming down the pike. I haven't seen Vampire Bund, but was that 900 year old loli shown topless and having sex? Other titles people keep comparing it to feature at least teens. And no borderline bestiality. So yeah, there's a couple of things where this has crossed the line.

I forgot to mention my lovely Katze from Ai no Kusabi. As you can see, I prefer a harem to one husbando. Or waifu. Captain Elizabeth from Mars Daybreak Balsa from Moribito

Did you not notice who was calling your old sn unoriginal?

Date Registered ‎ 09-17-2003 02:38 AM