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PhilosipherStoned

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Not sure if dark anecdote is just right or over the top.. That owl though.. Who remembers that commercial?

Anotha day anotha dolla in this crooked ass saga
if the glass is half full I gotta empty ass wallet;
Some niggas think I'm ballin they don't got a whachucallit;
Job or occupation? That's not ta say I'm hatin;
That is just an observation; I have got a job;
as well as many occupations; drop a song 
and back to skatin'; your hobby's masterbatin'?
well mine is aspiration; sewin' up the cracks in the fabric of a nation;
pickin' up the fallen as they crawl to aid stations ..
cuttin' at the cancer takin' mothahs from their babies.
so many others; they need to find their places;
As for me I think I've found it, my place, I'll give you inspiration
whether from a house or the gutter or a basement; No need for accupuncture
you can keep ya FACELIFT; Save it for ya bitch cuz! this is not that FAKE SHIT!!
I shouldn't have ta say this.. but nor is it straight gang shit; 
this is just my take on how the wu tang would bang this 
Comin' from the angle of an artist feelin' dangerous..
'bout ta rip apart the hearts of those that try to test my patience
How many licks you think it takes me with this solid piece of stainless!
One! TwwwwEhheew! No wait I've got to maintain shit!

 

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Actually staying on beat and in meter the 3rd sixteen ends at..whatever

This is just my take on how the wu tang would bang this- First bar of verse 3...

This shit needs a hook I think.. a rhyme hook.

I think I might be able to use a simple quatrain at the end of each loop to put together a hook.

or refrane this?

so many others; they need to find their places;
As for me I think I've found it, my place, I'll give you inspiration
whether from a house or the gutter or a basement;

not a bad little rhyme hook I guess.. Now I just gotta figure out how to tie all this together with the name.

some other time.. ¬¬ Intro. 2 Verses. Hook. 2 verses. Hook/outro?

 

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